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  • fen'harel

    fen'harel (560)

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    Your descriptions are just... fucking perfect Chan.

    I love the sort of dettached feeling you, as the narrator, have over these characters; everything is sort of technical, but it drips emotions and I love it.

    The adrenaline could actually be felt; I felt it and it was vivid.

    Even if it was really short, this story managed to pour in so much emotions and images in my head. It was amazing.

    Also, I noticed there were no grammatical errors, which made the story perfect.

    Great job.
    February 23rd, 2010 at 01:25am
  • moxie;

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    :D I love the way you put it out! Weird
    Absolutely lovely! Con I could feel the scene playing in my head. :3
    It was intense and absolutely fantastic.
    I loved the middle part. Happy face tehe I'm too lazy to go back and copy/paste but I think you know what I mean.
    I loved the way you phrased everything. It was weaved so well. Happy face So great.
    Amazing job, Chuey! Arms
    February 23rd, 2010 at 12:42am
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