Manage Me, I'm a Mess - Comments

Ok this story is good but then I got to the middle of chapter 3 or 4 and couldn't take it anymore. Not to sound harsh or offend your writing but there are just some things I don't understand.
Chapter 1
Jack was kinda Bi-Polar.
Chapter 4
He grabbed me by my shirt and grabbed one of my breasts and squeezed it, deliberately digging his nails into it. Why is she letting him treat her like that? He left and I brought the other three guys’ drinks in. When I walked by him, Jack jumped out and poured his beer on me and threw his now empty cup to the floor. He pulled my shirt towards himself and dumped his can’s contents down it. I wanted to cry, but I wouldn’t give Jack another thing to laugh at me for. So I just left the room. I don't know but I think anyone would've quit after that. Who in their right mind would put up with that type of abuse and at work? And other than that she could've been sued him. “Awesome.” He grinned. He approached me and we kissed. His shirt came off and soon I was straddling his waist. what ever happened to her boyfriend Alex? The one that beat up Jack in chapter 2? And at the end of the chapter she hooks up with Jack... now she's just whoreing it up a little too much. And I never got to chapter 5 because of this.
There were too many things, descriptive wise, that weren't great.Now before your start sending me comments cursing me out or something I just wanted to tell you about some of the things you could imrpove on. Like having the things in the beginning connect to things that happen later on. The grammer and spelling are perfect it's just how the story, or the plots going thats really getting me.

Sup? It me Mello (Carls). case u 4got who i iz, im in ur chorus class and only autumn is between us!

Hey! I love the story! Keep writing! I've known you long enough to tell you that, sometimes, using the same characters all the time can get a little boring... But you know how to mix it up and keep it interesting!
-That's my story, and I'm, sticking to it (lol. it goes great with what i said! lol.)
~Dawn

Okay not to sound like a bitch but I didn't mean it like keep posting or else.
I meant that I liked it and keep up the good work.
And you're always asking for comments so I'm commenting...I could stop if you want.
So if you want me to stop you can just tell me you don't have to write a whole chapter saying so. I can report you really easily for writing an update as a chapter but I won't do that because I've been reported for other things and it really bites.
But really keep the temper down a bit I mean PMS much? I didn't mean it the way you obviously interpreted it.

I love this story with a firey passion :)
Its immenseeeee!

Chap:13 reply-

Hahah it's okaaay. Take your time posting the chapters. I'll be waiting, but until then, have fun with your- "real" life. :P haha.

Keep it up, it's great being able to read a chapter everyday (and taking a break from my stupid hw haha).
I'm liking the drama, more please?

subscribeddd :)
i likeyyy :D

Haha those mofos' should commmmmment. =P
But awwwh it's okay, and aha, yeah you got it right. ^-^'

Chapter 10 wasn't too much haha. And zomfg-- I wanna know what happens in chap. 12...like...now! Aha. I hope everything works outttt. <.< And don't hate the chapter, I liked it =P

I was in an author's note too :DDD
Aha I had to catch up on like three chapters
(they were all amazing thooo)

And, and, and, THANK YOU for the red ones. :D
Hahaa.

I was in an author's note! I feel so special (:
WAIT, I want to know if he was the first or not! D:

I like the red ones the most (starbursts, that is) :D Haha.
And awwwwh, Jack ;( Nice chapterrr. And zomg the Towson Center in Maryland!? I went to a concert there xD Haha random. Anyhow- good chapter, can't wait for the next one ^-^' (I know I said that in the last chapter but it's still true ahaa)

Ooh, Jack's secret is out!
If it was a secret at all :P

I subbed. ...Can't wait for the next chapterrrr ^-^'

Haha, I like this.
I love how the first thing he says is "WHO THE HELL ARE YOU?" and then offers to pay for decor.
Subscribed :D