Aww this was really cute! I loved reading about Frank's inner conflictions.And I'm glad he came out of the closet, both literally and figuratively, at the end. :3
The layout: I like it, it’s simple and it’s not too garish or distracting. The summary/title: It’s intriguing. I like that it’s very riddle-esque, but that it also has a double meaning. I can tell what the story may be about (Frerard, right?). The story: Right off, Frank’s rant about the perfumed coats made me laugh. It’s so typical of a boy, I would think. The part where he talks about imperfection, I think that’s what a lot of us would want. Perfect is just so boring. The part where he talks about the irony of him and his hiding in closets, it gives insight for the character. Is he always so intuitive about himself, or is it just a one-time thing? I like how Frank tries to reason about his crush on Gerard.
I doesn’t at least! It should be I don’t, at least.
Normally, I’m not a fan of overly tense and anxious people, but Frank’s character makes it amusing. And the fact that he thinks Gerard will out him, and the fact that he is in the closet.
“Frank, come one! Frank, come on
Was he going to open the closet. There should be a ? at the end.
I like the ending; it’s very different. I thought that Gerard would be the first one to kiss him, but the ending totally changed my mind.
I like the story; it’s very cutesy and comical. I love your descriptions, and everything that goes on in Frank's head. You have a way of writing, and you should show that to the world. However, there are some grammatical errors that should be fixed, so that it doesn’t look unpolished or uncared for.
This was so good. Very well written and very captivating. I especially liked the sentence I was just sitting inside a closet, and he found me. The entire story of course was build around Frank being in the closet both mentally and physically, but that sentence just made the entire story culminate, if you can say that. It was like the climax. "He found me" = he found me out. Extremely well written. You should definately write more stories. =D
Ooooh, I like it! Especially the way you described everything.. and stuff. I know, I really suck at constructive criticism. Sorry! D: You should write more often. :] xo