It Was Only A Kiss - Comments

HI!!!
I like the story :D hope there's more to come after you overcome your writer's block. :D

Loved it, sorry about your comments page, by the way, I'll drop a message later, when I'm less sleepy.
More soon?
xD

I like it, but I'm gonna be OCD and give you some editing to be done:
"As I collapsed on to the bottom bunk of our dorm room's bed and lazily surveyed the room." -Kill the "as." It doesn't make sense.
"...but we had been lucky enough to get a spectacular view of the hundreds of cement, metal and glass building which clustered." -Which clustered....what?
"...after that I obviously snatched it off..." -"after that" and "obviously" can go. It's much better read that way :)
"...so turned on when I was licking my lips from the amazing food turned me on pretty badly as well." -There should be something along the lines of "that had" inbetween "food" and "turned."
""I guess we should go to that club ... are pretty reasonably priced too." -You should specify who's saying this, I got lost for a moment.
Now that I'm done being OCD, I really do like it :) You did a great way of demonstraiting the title especially. Just a tiny bit of editing, and it'll be even better :D
~Icamane

I like this, a lot, great writing.
More soon?
XD

I like this so far
It's pretty good :)