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pepper potts.
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One shot for one shot
This was good. I liked it but I did notice some spelling mistakes.
Riley and I were sitting on my bed doing each others nails-when we heard bang. Riley jumped, but I was used to it.
^ There should be no hyphen in that sentence.
And I noticed some incorrect use of the semicolon.
Other than that I thought it to be a good piece.
You're a good writer.
March 10th, 2010 at 06:50am
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This was good. I liked it but I did notice some spelling mistakes.
Riley and I were sitting on my bed doing each others nails-when we heard bang. Riley jumped, but I was used to it.
^ There should be no hyphen in that sentence.
And I noticed some incorrect use of the semicolon.
Other than that I thought it to be a good piece.
You're a good writer.