I Had the Best of Intentions All Along - Comments

The short sentences were effective.
They made the story really reflective of William and Gabe’s relationship and fit the point of view nicely.

Their relationship itself is very realistic; it’s not cutesy, happily ever after type stuff but it’s not devoid of love either. I like the fact that their relationship isn’t perfect; it rings true to real life. And also, the little details that you included about them made them more than words on a page.

The little amount of dialogue makes the scenarios in the story seem distant, which fits well, seeing as its William reflecting on them.

The ending sentence was short and simple, and a nice finish.
There was a lot of emotion behind it. And the fact that it was repeated made it more important.

One of my favourite sentences was this: We were already so exposed to each other that losing clothes would have brought out things we didn’t need.

It was nicely worded. I really got a feel for the depth of their relationship.

Very beautiful, Dru.

This was the first Gabilliam I’ve ever read. And I’m glad I chose this one.

This was the cutest Gabilliam(sp?) that I've ever read.

I love it to bits.

I liked the short sentences, it seemd more like a train of thought. I liked the tone and how William told his story. I liked how he described the song.
My favorite lines:

It was you. I forgave it.

He didn’t hold me. It would have been weird. But he slept with me that night, talked about anything but us the whole time.

^
Yay!
Thank you<3333333333333

I really love this;
My favourite bit, was

"You didn’t say anything. You didn’t even look at me. Halfway through you grabbed my hand. I leaned my head on your shoulder and you kissed my hair.

It did something to us, that song. Off tour you barely spent any time in Jersey. We fought more, but they were bickering arguments. We always made up right after. You smoked pot less. I found little gifts everywhere."

and then "We loved more"

I thought that really fit, with how everything had gone,
and how the last few lines went, it tied in well.
I also really like how the events weren't rushed in the story,
and how it went through the relationship, bit by bit.

=]

You didn’t say anything. You didn’t even look at me. Halfway through you grabbed my hand. I leaned my head on your shoulder and you kissed my hair.

That line made my tummy go squishy. I love cute little things like that, and also how it wasn't about just sex, but there was love, and it wasn't perfect either.

Fucking amazing.

That was the most important.

We loved more.
^That line spoke to me most. I liked this story a lot, probably because it was real. It makes me think of a real relationship, not a fake, plastic Disney one. Also, the narration was amazing. I could imagine William telling this story to someone, or to Gabe for someone. It made me think that this could happen with them.

My favorite aspect of it was the real-ness. Like I said, it made me think of how real relationships work out, not fake ones.

I loved it.
<3

New story.
Gabe/William.
William writes a song for Gabe.
Not a songfic.
Song title is never mentioned, but if you listen to TAI or have a search engine I think you can figure it out.
Partially inspired by Gabe interview William at the VMAs.
Comments are love.

Happy reading!

xoxox
-Dru