April 27th, 2010 at 01:28am
wow... they really need to talk it out CALMLY and thoroughly, else it'll just blow in their faces later!
I really like this story and I have some con-crit for you, if that's okay :) I just noticed in this chapter and I think in the ones before, too, that sometimes you switch between present and past tense a little, mainly connected to 'has' (for example one sentence, I think, was 'Sidney has no idea what to do', when it should be 'SIdney had no idea what to do')
Can't wait for more updates.