Caught in My Throat - Comments

Like the person above me said, it was great and your use of imagery was simply amazing. I liked that I could imagine everything, but there were some improvements that could be made. The layout was very hard to read, so I had to highlight everything. Also, the title should be capitalized. When dialogue is used, you should end the sentence with a comma and the closing quotations.

An example:
"The sky is blue," Mary said.

Also, I think that describing the main character a little would help the reader "see" the scene.
I think the spoon and needle thing is a reference to drugs, am I correct?

Thanks for entering my contest, and you did a great job with this story.

Okayyyy. Review time!(:
I thought it was very good. Beautiful imagery. But I did have a few problems.
I was really confused.
The layout hurt my eyes and it was hard to focus on the story when I could barely read parts of it.
A spoon and a needle? I dont understand that part either.

BUT. All in all, it was really pretty and adorable!(: