Drowning in Love - Comments

What an interesting story! Quite a scary thought, the end you have there though. Quite sad.

Oh...
How beautiful.

"What else did they expect from a girl who fell in love with a river?"

I'm speechless.

Wow. I did not see that end coming. Great job on that!

This was absolutely amazing. Unexpected, but amazing. Well done.

This might suck, but eh. My comments are never that well done.
But anyways...

The banner is lovely. It's pretty and classy. I like it a lot. The layout goes well with the banner, which means it's beautiful and simple. They all agreed she was insane. But they never knew she would go so far. Love can do horrible and beautiful things to people. I really really love this. It's true and I think this is a well done story.

I loved this story, it was weird since she was in love with a river, but it was beautifully done. The description was amazingly done love. I'm amazed at how you're thirteen but eh. You're amazing, you should totally publish this? Yeah <3

I agree with Alexander. You are a really good writer.
And you're thirteen?
I am too and yet I can't write as well as you.
You are like my inspiration.
This was absolutley beautiful as I am sure all of your stories are.
This comment sucked didn't it?
But its the truth. (=

Okay, uhm. I have to admit that this comment will suck, so I hope that this exucse will suffice as to why the comment sucks xD
You. Are. Amazing. Your writing is speechless-worthy. Are you seriously thirteen? I mean, god. My writing sucked when I was thirteen.
WHY AREN'T YOU PUBLISHED?! The world has gone to the dogs! <3

The whole story was beautifully worded. It really made me think and I loved every second of it :)

Such a bittersweet story. You described everything so wonderfully. The story was niether rushed nor took forever. Elizabeth is such an intresting character. Amazing.

This whole story was beautiful and tragic, and unfolded splendidly. The story was clearly set in a different time; the language and writing hinted at it, but never quite outright said it. I liked that, sort of leaving it to one's imagination. The ending was fantastic and so, so perfect. Falling in love with a river? Utterly original. My only complaint is that some of your sentences feel rather incomplete; perhaps you could combine them? It just seems like they don't fit together very well. It didn't seem to flow as well as it should in certain places. Otherwise, your description is gorgeous, and I just love the way you write.

On a completely unrelated note, I love the image you used in your story. Keira looked stunning in that shoot; I have the magazine it was from. All in all, this was a lovely piece.

That's one great story. The only thing I noticed that seems rather iffy to me was:

"Elizabeth sat on the chair in an awkward position with her leg hanging out over the armrest. The silky cool feel of the wood rubbed against her bare leg as she twirled a strand of dark hair around her slender finger."

I could be wrong, but shouldn't it be:
"Elizabeth sat on the chair in an awkward position with her leg hanging out over the armrest; the silky cool feel of the wood rubbed against her bare leg as she twirled a strand of dark hair around her slender finger."

Either way, the story was beautifully written and the description was amazing. The story didn't lack and it just had the perfect wording and balance to make it great.

Great job.

Thought since you're giving away free comments, someone should comment your writting, which I'm glad I found.

Wow, I loved this. You did such a great job, I'm happy I stumbled across this piece.

It really made me think. Well done.

I really love this.
It's so interesting.
Everything about is perfect and it's so original!
I love how you wrote it.
Beautiful job <3

So... as I was reading this interesting story, one question kept coming to mind. How the hell did you come up with this? It is quite lovely and at the same time morbid, but it's just so off the wall. I loved it. Good job.

I loved this one shot, it was absoulutly stunning and beatiful to me. Unexpected, but hey, a normal forbiden love has been done too many times, huh? Very original and I applaud you on that.

-Katie

Oh wow ._____.

That was shocking. But I absolutely loved it. After all, I've got a story on another site where a guy falls in love with music...like, romantic love and everything. And I personified the music and they ended up both killing themselves. To this day I don't quite know what happened .___.

But anyway. You didn't tell us she fell in love with the river until the end. That was just epic. The whole way through, I was thinking it was just someone her parents didn't approve of. But then you made it the river and totally shocked me like crazy xD I think drowning was the perfect way to kill herself, though, it definitely made her one with her love. Kinda makes me wonder if the river was sentient enough to understand that she killed herself for it .___.

Oh my gosh...I didn't expect that!
Very well writen. I approve! Lol

I agree with a lot of the comments! Like making the picture come to life. That was awesome. :) I love the story. :D

Wow, this is really beautiful. I love your descriptive imagery, I could really see the scene as it was laid out for me. Your words have a great flow, and you kept me guessing until the end.

Like the commenter above, ^^.
The ending was very unexpected, this was a first for me and it really was interesting. Even though people might be freaked out by the fact that she's in love with water.
I can understand why people categorized Elizabeth as a lunatic.
Yet this story really caught my attention with the first few lines.
But the ending was completely unexpected. Which can be a good thing :).
You did a great job, if this is how you usually write your stuff, I'd be interested in reading some of your other things.