Irrational and Stupid - Comments

omg! I cant believe andrew! Total jerk wad! it makes me frustrated! geez louise......Any way, I loved it, i even like Andrew's character, until he did that to Skylar, its all his fault.....

I want more! This Andrew character is bad news! *frowns*

Hey there,
I really like your story because its kind of cute, in a sad, sad way and because the characters are very real. But I do feel as if you're rushing through the story. Maybe that's just your style of writing, but I know that as a reader I would have liked to see more of their relationship than I was shown, so that the impact of the seperation would be more powerful. If you edit that in the future, I suggest you add some details of their emotional evolution and dependance on each other. Try to move your story away from the slightly cliche plot. :)

Other than that, I wanted to say, your user name is Keep Faith In the World, how can you then lose hope so quickly? You're writing a wonderful story and it'll get the fame it deserves in due time:) Tell me do you write because you love to write or because you want to have a ten-star story and be mibba-famous? I suggest you should write because you love to write. That's the only way your story will have un-put-down-able-ness of a story in which the author has layed his soul bare and written from the heart.

Despite everything, you're doing a great job! Keep it up and don't lose faith!!!!

--Injila.:)