My Clumsy Tongue Will Make it Right - Comments

this is amazing.
you should make it into a full story :3
<3

:(
why couldn't she stay with him?
poor John...
But it's good that she is finally moving one
I really liked this short story :D

I really enjoyed this!
For one, it didn't have a happy ending. Instead of doing the expected ending (Emily
Listening to John and going back with him), she left.
I have to admit, reading John crying like that made me feel for the boy. He wanted
Her to stay so much - just to have a second chance. But she didn't give in.
There were a few grammar errors, but it didn't take away from the story. They could easily
Be overlooked. You did a great job! (: