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  • becauseiamfree

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    this is amazing.
    you should make it into a full story :3
    <3
    November 20th, 2011 at 05:49pm
  • pixiedusttt.

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    :(
    why couldn't she stay with him?
    poor John...
    But it's good that she is finally moving one
    I really liked this short story :D
    April 3rd, 2010 at 03:45pm
  • la dispute.

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    I really enjoyed this!
    For one, it didn't have a happy ending. Instead of doing the expected ending (Emily
    Listening to John and going back with him), she left.
    I have to admit, reading John crying like that made me feel for the boy. He wanted
    Her to stay so much - just to have a second chance. But she didn't give in.
    There were a few grammar errors, but it didn't take away from the story. They could easily
    Be overlooked. You did a great job! (:
    April 2nd, 2010 at 03:23am
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