Playing With Danger - Comments

I think the chapters could be a bit longer, but it is very interesting, your writing is vivid && shows a lot of detail!

Chapter 3
I kind of dislike her friend for doing that. Getting her in a crowd of people she probably didn't even know and having the nerve to leave, sip a few nice cups of alcohol and have a one night stand.
Alahendra should have fought her and stayed home.
But, yeah. I really love how you write these chapters, it's just wow.
I feel sorry for her, she's clearly at the bottom of the sack right now, feeling paranoid like that.
The one who is watching her is driving her mad.

Chapter 4
Just as great as the before chapter.
I do wonder if the person... the guy from the prologue (I believe), is currently inside of the house.
The window that she claims that she has not opened.
Did he open it and came inside?
Eh, but he wouldn't be so stupid as to actually leave it open... would he?

I think that this story is turning out great so far. You've left us with a bit of a mystery to try and solve for ourselves until the next update. Wonderful!

I'm beginning to think that this is going to be like a romance thriller novel?
Because she's going through a state of depression and anxiety, hearing noises that shouldn't be heard and seeing open windows that she had no recollection of opening.
Then, in the other chapter, she sees a boy.
Is he supposed to be like a character she meets again and falls in love or is he some kind of crazy murderer guy?

You know what I think Kayla? I think Miss Alahendra has a lot of your personality breaking through her.
Love it.
More soon, yeah?

I think your short chapters are just fine.
It's the way you want it, your visual.
Keep it up!

I agree with CompletelyImaginary
The chapter could have been longer.
Other than that, your descriptions are fantastic.
They really put a picture in your head

You have absolutely AMAZING descriptions and I loved the new chapter. The only thing I can find to criticize is that I wish it had been a little longer. =P

Prologue:
Wow, that was amazing. The words you choose to use make everything sound so perfect.
I can see everything nicely.
I enjoyed how you started the prologue and really the words you used and the way it's all written, it all pulled me in.

Chapter 1:

Letting it sink it that I was roughly a week into my long needed summer.
Is it supposed to be: Letting it sink in

The chapter was just as amazing as the prologue, the way you write is excellent.
I'm already falling in love with this story.
You don't give things away, you keep me guessing and the choice of words.
The words you use are just so perfect, it makes it so much easier to imagine everything.
I just love it.

Chapter 2:

Wow, another amazing one :)
Seriously, I have absolutely no complains what-so-ever.
Everything is just awesome.

The way you write, the words you use and I really do love that you don't rush through things.

I'm subscribing and can't wait for more :D

OMG i love it
can't wait for more
but how do you probounce the main character's name?

very interesting.
Your word choice is phenomenal.
More please.

I really like it.
You paint beautiful pictures with your words Miss.
More please?

your stories always somehow manage to captivate my interest i feel like a drug addict no matter how much i try not to read them because i know what will happen i end up doing it i have a feeling you will get quite some views every soon wonderful beginning

i love it so far=)
keep goin'

I like it.
It's amazing so far & very interesting.
I hope you continue it!

I really hope you continue that. Your writing is absolutely lovely.

I like it!
Its very interesting.
Can't wait to find out what its about. :)