Dream Girl - Comments

OMG! So, so, so cute!! Loved the last chapter of this, loved the whole thing! Also I agree with laura about the gay thing...

LOL JUSTIN. I can see him being the gay best friend, doing all her make up like an expert. Hahaa. Anyway, I'm glad they got a happy ending and this was nice and short and sweet. And I'm happy they managed to get together in the end (: loved it, Charis.

This is great but holy crap, Charis, REALLY?!
I FELT SO CREEPY READING THIS, IT'S NOT EVEN FUNNY.

But it was great despite all that :D

I think the idea of your story is a nice one, but I feel the actual writing is weak. I honestly don't mean that in a harsh way, but it feels unrealistic and action-after-action to me. I'm reading it, but I'm not seeing anything. Kinda straightforward and it didn't keep my attention very much. But, I do think that if it's edited a little, it can turn into something even better than it already is.

I like that Melina didn't cheat on Logan and broke up with him before she did (if she was going to) and that she recognizes that he and Summer should be together, Like I said.

Awww. Idk if I like Melina. Idk if Logan's dream was just a meaningless dream. Idk if Summer's lying and is really into Godlike, I mean, who wouldn't? Idk if Logan and Summer should be together, cos Melina sounds perfect. But idk, as long as it ends happily (:

LOVE

Though I still think a little bit that this is going to go where I thought it was going to go but mayb not hi I like run-on sentences!

OMG YOU FUCKING WOULD <3333333333