November 10th, 2010 at 08:35pm
This piece was full of raw emotion - so heartbreaking. Each and every sentence was meaningful to the piece. My gosh, I loved this. So many people are able to relate to this; a death in the family. Especially a death following prolonged illness. I commend you for being able to write this, and for how well you were able to write this.
Your writing is very powerful. It makes people feel. I liked the layout. It was very simple, and I didn't have to switch to default to read, which was very good. The picture fit the writing perfectly.
One thing I will mention, however, is that you entered this in the drabble section. A drabble is an extremely short work of fiction exactly one hundred words in length, although the term is often incorrectly used to indicate a short story of fewer than 1000 words. It's not that big of a deal, but still not quite the correct category.
:)
You weren’t ready, I could tell. Your chest shuddered and you screamed; a noise that was unbearable to me. This really tugged on my heartstring. Just a sentence and it's was really powerful.
You are an amazing writer. You pulled this off with such sincerity. i really wish you well with your future work, as I know that it will be as powerful and amazing as this.
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