July 12th, 2012 at 07:24pm
Unexpected Love - Comments
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And i have one word for my comment when you type the next chapter: POPCORN! hehe :P type the next chapter plz i will love you until a dinosaur comes back here or at least til my gramma visits nah she an't no dinosaur but my sister pretends to be one but anyway i'll love ya til that chapters out then i'll love you even more if they keep coming :D i'm cereal manbearpig ;)July 12th, 2010 at 10:51pm
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ooooo ok then i am comenting again to continue this awsomeness of a story since my life is devoid of awsomeness >:( please continue to write :DJuly 6th, 2010 at 05:21am
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Death flower you did because I say comments inspire me to write the next chapterJune 23rd, 2010 at 09:57pm
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may i just ask how did i inspire you?June 12th, 2010 at 05:08pm
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ok im commenting so the chapter will come out soon. HINT* and i really like it so far. HINT* type away my friend. HINT* ok im finished hinting
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im sorry i couldn't resist XDJune 6th, 2010 at 08:23pm -
just plain hilarious! update soon please!April 13th, 2010 at 01:22am
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writeeee!! :DMarch 31st, 2010 at 08:36pm
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:D XDMarch 21st, 2010 at 03:20am
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I really like this story! Great plot. Please keep writing. (: I don't normally write on people's stories or leave a comment, I just usually jst read. LOL, but this is truly amazing. I was kinda hoping Char and Alex would hook up at the party. YAY, lol. Keep it up !March 20th, 2010 at 07:44pm
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Nice. Can't wait to see how it turns out!March 20th, 2010 at 06:09am
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really good! :DMarch 19th, 2010 at 09:12pm
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amazing story
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keep the chapters cuminMarch 19th, 2010 at 08:59pm -
yaya i'm first!!! anyways great story!!!March 19th, 2010 at 06:02pm
I really enjoy this story. One thing i would like to take note is make sure to put a space after punctuation, simple little things like that. Also, it seems as though you keep starting the majority of your sentences with "I" or "Then I" Just add a little bit more variation to the beginning of your sentences.
Also, I feel as though your characters could be a little bit more dynamic. They're cool, just have a little bit more depth to them
Make sure to start a new line/paragraph every time someone speaks.
And if I were you, I'd change the title. It's a bit awkward.
Sorry if you thought any of this was rude, just trying to help a fellow writer.