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  • sweet clementine.

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    Breathtaking.
    November 18th, 2010 at 12:25am
  • still a secret

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    Nice layout!
    That was a very poetic, slightly confusing, but definitely interesting summary. But forever engraved on our souls[.]” exclaimed the youthful artist, - that should be a comma instead of a period.
    engulfed by an army [ ] malevolent moss. The young woman who had [caused] this agony was oblivious to the distress which she had [caused]. - there's a missing "of" and the 2nd sentence sounds kinda funny.
    Her beauty grazed the night lights until the stars were ashamed to sparkle in her presence. - I kinda love this line because of the personified stars. :)
    Oh! Now I understand the excerpt in the summary! I thought when he said "He possessed the heart of a maiden" that it was his own heart that was that of a maiden. I thought he underwent sexchange or something. xD Haha. Now I see.
    Awww, poor bird. :(
    This story was lovely. You sure have a way with words. And I liked how it ended. Great job on this!
    June 6th, 2010 at 02:36am
  • solovely;

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    I like when people talk all old and stuff, you know? I think it gives a regal approach to life and everything in it. It's very clean cut and just simply amazing.
    May 15th, 2010 at 12:04am
  • alexander bernadotte

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    Wow. This was absolutely beautiful!
    The words, the imagry - sigh.
    Amazing! Truly (: I agree with
    fog people though - love the
    Sweeney Todd feel ;D
    Totally subscribing :]
    <333
    March 29th, 2010 at 01:53am
  • onexlookxcanxkill

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    Very beautiful. I love your style of writing. And I love stories based on older times. You're amazing.
    March 28th, 2010 at 03:09am
  • silk tea.

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    You've got a lovely way of capturing the "Sweeney Todd" feel.
    I love it, not to mention I'm obsessed with the movie.
    I made sure that I knew every song before I went and saw it.
    Oh, Johnny. :]

    I like this a lot so far, and therefore I shall subscribe.
    March 27th, 2010 at 01:58am
  • EverRose

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    Wow I loved it! It's defently THE BEST I've read on here! You did an amazing job
    March 24th, 2010 at 10:15pm
  • jasonsudekis

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    Goodness gracious, Ben. I've never read anything quite so eloquent in all my life. The details were absolutely perfect, and the language you used is just astounding for someone of your age.

    Honestly, I was blown away by this two-shot. Amazing, amazing job!
    March 24th, 2010 at 08:16pm
  • reportme

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    Wow! Your plans did not compare to this. It is your very best.

    I did not understand all the words but I know you and you used thesaurus... I would have.
    March 23rd, 2010 at 06:38pm
  • she had the world.

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    I loved this. It was so sad, and sweet, in an unexplainable way.
    This was amazingly well written. Fantastic job. [:
    March 19th, 2010 at 10:32pm
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