UM sometimes it's hard to tell who you are talking about in the sentences and paragraphs. Like with the girl running thourgh the woods I couldn't tell if it was her or a different female character. the same with Zaku and his father it was hard to tell in the paragraphs if iwas him or his father you were discirbing. PS it reminds of Avatar L
the same with Zaku and his father it was hard to tell in the paragraphs if iwas him or his father you were discirbing.
PS it reminds of Avatar
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