Can I Take You Home? - Comments

Beautiful, fun, and sexy! I love it!

Thanks for entering!

THAT WAS AMAZING! :D <33333333 but I wish it wasn't a one shot ;___; it has potential to be a good slash story!

Mhm, I agree with batteryqueer. There were very few grammatical errors from what I saw and yeah, I did kinda miss some description at the concert. BUT omg, the sex scene was great. xD I sound like such a pervvv. T__T But yeah, good job and good luck!

Haha, nice, lol. d:
That was a fun read. Straight to the point. xD
A few grammatical errors (mainly your present/past tenses), but nothing major. x]
Oh, and the layout's pretty too.
Especially the image. [x

Good job. :D

Hehe, Breathe Carolina! XD You got extra points for that. (:

Alright. Here comes the harsh criticism. No, I'm only kidding. There was few grammatical errors, but those were careless. Something you can't pick up because you read it too much while writing it, so I understand. I honestly think it was rushed. I mean, it could have been longer and more descriptive. Descriptive as in the place around them, the smell, and the overall feel of the concert, you know? Other than that, I adored it. The smutt scene made me go :D! Like literally, I love slash. <3

So wonderfully fantastic job, and good luck!