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  • Billie Holiday

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    Somethings I noticed while reading:

    I reach out and give her a hug, something that hasn't happened it what feels like forever. (ch.3)
    something that hasn't happened IN what feels like forever

    Once I know she's in bed and everyone is asleep, I slip on a pair of sneakers, climb back out my window and (down the just outside.) (ch.3)
    The part in parentheses I'm not sure what you meant to say...but maybe, down the SIDE of the house to the outside? I really don't know.

    Anyway I'm really enjoying this story so far and hope you pick it back up one day!
    June 23rd, 2011 at 11:40pm
  • melinda 666

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    I love this and it should have more comments, yes
    May 27th, 2010 at 03:15am
  • MelissaDevine

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    Very intriguing, keep updating please :]
    April 29th, 2010 at 09:06pm
  • MelissaDevine

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    This is cool aha, i like it
    April 10th, 2010 at 01:57am
  • daggers

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    i like this.
    i find claire very intruiging, and the story line.
    especially about the lasagna, it's all about the little things.
    April 2nd, 2010 at 12:11am
  • melinda 666

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    super duper cool!
    March 28th, 2010 at 08:41pm
  • LeleDisco

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    Hmm. I think I like this one more than your other new story.
    March 25th, 2010 at 09:45pm
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