Fluttergirl - Comments

Not going to lie, I don't remember reading or commenting on this at all. But the layout is beautiful. And while I definitely like the premise of it, I don't really like the structure it's written in. The way it looks on the layout is all really...weird. It's all to one side and looks more like a poem than a story. There was a few spelling errors throughout and the only chapter I have any problems with is the last one. You say she nearly toppled over with a scream...and I thought this mean the co-worker but then the main female is all like oh we're closed. It just read oddly to me, I think it said something happened when you really didn't mean for that to happen. But yes, great job so far.

This is gorgeous.<3
I love how uniquly and amazingly it's written.
It's still got all the detail I love and yet, it's so different from everything. :)

I really should read more of this, hehe. Like Mumford said, I really need to find some new descriptive words because I don't think any in my vocabulary quite cover how amazing this is. C:
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I'm really wondering where this is going, seriously. I can't wait for more. This writing is just spectacular. You're amazing. :) I'm going to have to invest in a new adjective because amazing isn't cutting it.

I love the layout. It's gorgeous and the banner is really good. It's really amazing. So much detail and I am hooked. Update soon. <3 Subbing

AH! YOU UPDATED! YAY YOU. :) This is so poetic, that's what I love about it. Not many, or any for that matter, on mibba write like this. Its very original. I loved this chapter. The closing line was perfect! Can't wait for the next installment. <3

I love this writing style! It's choppy and WONDERFUL. And descriptive at the same time, it's amazing.
And it's so beautiful. Short and wonderful is my favorite. It's poetic, almost.
And the actual story. Wow. I'm hooked.

I'm coming back just to say that this has me hooked, and even if you were to never update again, even though I hope that's not the case, I will forever be subscribed to it, and I will love what you've given us already. <3

update this, yeah? I don't know, you've got me enthralled, and I want to know what happens next.

This is so beautifully written. I really love it. The descriptions in particular were wonderful.

wow. enough said. can't wait to see where it leads.

Wow, this was really great. I love the style you've written in, and the language you use is very captivating. I can't wait to see more. :)

I really liked this peice.
It was short and sweet.
I enjoyed the repetition you put in too,
It added and extra feel to it.
I'm not sure what the feeling is...
but it's a good feeling:]

Well I love the layout first of all.
I'm not so sure about the summary. It's kind of random.

But the story itself was beautifull written.
I like the poetic style it's put in.
That definitely made it very well.
Keep it up.

interesting opening to a story. I like it, smoothly written.