His Little Plaything - Comments

Please keep going! Update soon!

write some more

I subscribed.

Keep it and update!

KEEP!

*Yawn* I tired of waiting for you to update! So, defintely keep writing!:D

I hope your going to update soon!:)

O: More!

I LOVE UR STORY!
Jake shud become her best friend..

I'M IN LOVE!
Please update soon! :3
<3<3<3
~Bree

Hey you guys. This is Toxic Valentine. I totally forgot my password, so I made an account using my old username.
I'm reposting this story on this account :)

Um I've just happened to stumble upon this story and it's really good. So please update soon. I really love this story

good, story (:
cant wait for more.

You need to learn how to take constructive criticism. Your story had a good idea, but if you can't write it correctly, then it will get reported, and if you don't fix it, then I'll be more than willing to report it. THE GRAMMAR NEEDS WORK! That's all there is to it. It is obvious that you did NOT. I didn't say once that I didn't like it, in fact if you f*cking actually read it, then you would notice that I said I loved it. It just had too many mistakes. ALSO, right above where you leave your comment, let me copy and paste that...
Try to write meaningful comments. Tell authors what you like or dislike about their story.
Constructive criticism is always welcome, but don't be mean. Insulting won't be tolerated.

Which is exactly WHAT I did. I was not disrespectful in the least. GROW UP!

I do agree with Toph above, please fix up your story. I do love it, but it's mistakes are too noticeable. I really want to see where it's going. Also, I'm a bit confused about the owner. Who is her owner? Maybe I'm a bit more confused, but that's just because of the grammar and mistakes. Please, fix them up.

I don't want to be mean... Everyone seems to love it, but I seriously can't get into it because of the spelling mistakes and the somewhat messed up punctuation... Hopefully the rewritten version is better. But good luck, and I am so sorry if I sounded mean...

No, I didn't know you're rewriting it!! I would like longer updates, just cuz it means more happens!! I really like it!

it wouldnt let me comment on your profile but ukmm like most of the stories are talking how everyone is strait like its just girls who are the cough 'family' hhaah

I definitely wouldn't be opposed to longer updates!! Is Alex her "owner"?

Haha! I lurved it! =] And I finally found out how to message you! (I'm a little slow) >.>