This was amazing. I loved it.
April 7th, 2010 at 02:13am
Oh, where to even start on this. First off, let me just that I loved it.
You didn't try to rush the story - you let it flow perfectly.
I love that Adeline was completely out there the first time they met.
And their encounter was so cute, I have to admit. I even laughed a little at Doug
Just taking off, and John yelling after him.
Their relationship seemed to be perfect, which is why I was curious as to why she just left abruptly.
But the ending explained it. I felt bad for John, as he seemed to be so hurt and
Heartbroken. However, I'm glad that in the end, Adeline explained that she was just
Scared to be in love, because that's completely understandable.
I didn't really catch any grammar or spelling errors, and you had a good choice of words
And descriptions, which I loved.
You really did an amazing job! (: