Hmm, this was an interesting piece. In the beginning I thought she was in an asylum or something, but it cleared up. I couldn't find any errors, and all that I can say that you could improve is maybe make it longer? I think it would have been even more interesting. Good job, though.
In the beginning I thought she was in an asylum or something, but it cleared up.
I couldn't find any errors, and all that I can say that you could improve is maybe make it longer?
I think it would have been even more interesting.
Good job, though.