Voluptas - Comments

This is absolutely darling, Ella. I love the simplicity within the description and how the story is all based around the romance and how it ties in to the house. I love the girl's reasons for wanting to live somewhere where she could see the sky, sacrificing the tranquility of living somewhere where it's quieter in favor of seeing something she loves. The characterizations and the interaction between the character both work smoothly and make sense; I just love it.

YOU HAVE TIME TO WRITE THIS BUT NOT FINISH MY BIRTHDAY PRESENTS THAT ARE HOW LONG OVER DUE?!




iluandthisstorybegewdbutfinishmineplz

I liked it. I genuinely enjoyed reading this one-shot.

The descriptions were solid and simple but vibrant nonetheless. They built on top of each, really creating a world unto themselves.

The characters and interactions between them were spaced out well and very believable. It seemed very natural. A real Polaroid of time, just a small snapshot of their lives.

The way everything added up at the end created a really sweet ending.

A very well-written one-shot, indeed. Good job.