July 30th, 2010 at 12:09am
OH EM GEE.
Ugh, that totally sucks. I can't believe he was so heartless as to throw away a candy wrapper like that. It just goes to show that even if you don't care about the environment, it still cares about you, because a lot of animals can die really easily with stuff like that. I'm really fucking glad I don't litter now, because if I did this would be like a shot to the heart.
I wasn't going to read this but it drew me in, and I love the anticlimax :)
This was pretty well written.
The only thing I would say for you to do is to make different paragraphs for each time the character talks. Like:
"Hi," said Pat.
"Hey," replied Spongebob.
Instead of:
"Hi," said Pat.
"Hey," replied Spongebob.
Yes, I used Spongebob. xD But anyway, I still like it. :)