Still Beat - Comments

I actually really enjoy this.
The summary is beautiful, as is the title.
I'll definitely subscribe.
I think it's beautiful. :]

I don't want to leave a ridiculously lengthy comment, because I'm speeding to judge some comments at the momento. But you do know that I love you right? You're an incredible author, and one of the most enjoyable to speak to.

Excellent. I can honestly say that I can't wait for more.

The simplicity of this really pulled me in. You have a real way with words (:
In my fantasies, I always imagined that my boobs would be much bigger than they are now. I never got the bus, though, and I never got the bust. So much for fantasies. <-- This is awesome x]

Well I don't know what it is about your writing but it has this style to it that is so beautiful to read. You describe everything yet so subtely so its not overdoing it and you can almost feel the atmosphere in the place. Whilst you do introduce the characters you don't give us every detail of there life so as a reader we can imagine them and relate to them as we like. The summary was quite capturing and made me read on. I like the way you are slowly sliding into the plot and not hitting us with all this information at once. The flowing of the writing and the inclusion of dreams and other perspectives make if good to read. I will subscribe so I can find out more because it is definitely a cliffhanger XD

This was seriously amazing. I really adore your style, and the flow of this first chapter was just so easy to read. Everything felt so natural, even though the situation was far from it.

I love how you've actually written a realistic female character that doesn't come off as a total bitch or a weak, helpless fragile thing. It's hard to find someone who can write good female characters, but you've definitely done it.

I especially loved this line:

In my fantasies, I always imagined that my boobs would be much bigger than they are now. I never got the bus, though, and I never got the bust. So much for fantasies.

It made me chuckle and relieved a lot of the tension built up by the altercation between Aaron and the narrator.

I actually really liked this story, so stick with it!

I fucking adore your dialog. I think it is so realistic, yet there is some kind of magic behind it. He reminds me of a mad-hatter of sorts, a little bit more sane though. But he is magic, I don't know. I just loved every word he said. That whole exchange at the end of chapter-one made me want to continue to chapter two- which I am. So, I guess you can say you have a new reader, because I am subcribing to this and finishing it up tonight =D

Also, my favorite line: I laughed and laughed, because it was funny. Because without Kent, even laughing wouldn't be possible.

It was a painfully sad line, because it kind of reminded me of me and my ex- where...I only thought I could be happy with him around. Needless to say, he is also pretty good at leaving, while I am epically good at staying- perhaps too good.

Really, you're writing, ignited a lot of emotions. I love it. =D

I absolutely love your writing style. It's so original and fresh. The way you describe things is great and the characters personalities are so life-like. This story is off to a great start and I can't wait to read whatever you come up with next. Update soon please. (:

It's so lovely...
Please please please continue. (:

This chapter was fabulous. I especially loved what he answered her when she asked him why he was on the bus. I think he is a really interesting character. I don't really think I have anything else to say. It's really good.

very interesting :)

This is beautiful. I love it.
Mystery business man did come back after all!

I love your descriptions and your characters.
They're all very real and not overdone, they fit the story perfectly.
I'm definitely going to continue reading this, it's very grabbing. (:

Ack, this is way too intruiging.

I think that means you should update.
Quickly.

This is so good, I'm hooked.
'Nuff said. <3

This story is amazing. It got me hooked from the very beginning. I subscribed and can't wait to read more. Update soon please. (:

This is really cute!

I never realized how wonderful of a writer you are darling.
This is quite incredible I have to say.
It's hooking, and beautiful.
I'm subscribing. :]

i like this, keep going !

Well, you've got me hooked.
I'm not quite sure what's going on,
but I like it. It's giving my mind freedom to roam
before you set down the tracks.
I'll be reading more. :)