Things You Never Thought You Had - Comments

Punk rock was spread from the 70's and the 80's but no you are right my bad it should be 1977

1987 isn't when punk was beginning in the U.S.A., it began closer to around 1975.

>> http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Punk_rock

....I WAN T MORE!!! :D:D:D:D

i likes your story ger but i was so distracted by smilies that way ---> i 4got what it was aboot but im sure it was good because i found smilies look :D :) :( :o :shock: :oops: :cry: :evil: :twisted: :roll: ;) :| :mrgreen:

Really good

A few grammatical errors but they'll sort themselves out, if not I'll check them over for you.

But reall really good

I liked it , it was really good (just a little tooo life like for me lol) But your a good writer! Please keep it up!

You really did a lot better in the second chapter! Still a few mix ups (I could send you a PM with the corrections, if you want) but I thought it was rather well written.

The first chapter was okay...I mean, I personally don't tend to like chapters that give you basically all of the background information right off the bat. It's a lot for readers to comprehend, and most likey they won't remember the information later on in the story, and you'll just have to reiterate yourself. It's a waste most of the time, really. And, most of us reading this, know basic stuff about Oakland at that time, all the Green Day info and whatever....all I'm saying is, you could go without telling us everything that went on at that time.

The second chapter was pretty cool. I'd (almost) kill to play with Green Day. :D And you do realize that Tre joined Green Day in 1991, right? They'd have John as their drummer in 1987.

This sentence confused me slightly: "Well depends how fast we can learn your songs and how fast we learn yours.” Billie replied." You basically repeated yourself. I know you meant "Well, it depends on how fast we can learn your songs and how fast you learn ours." or something to that extent. But...just thought I'd point that out.

Hope I wasn't too harsh...I tried to be very lenient. Trust me, you'll know when I'm in a bad mood, I'll leave such a bitchy comment.....ANYWAYS. :D Hope you write more, I'm intrigued!

<3 Cherry

Hey i know ive made a few spelling mistakes in the first chapter but ive really tryed to make up in the second ...thanx for commenting

you write really good.
well update soon and i am subscribing.
and yeah....go you!!!!
peace outxx

Wow, it's really well written, bloody amazing.

I Shall Also Be Subscribing

It Pwns!

-Kate.xxx

*steals comment vigrinity*

Good start! It's really good Ger! *subscribes* and by any chance is Rhys and Sparky based on anyone?....

lmao I want more dammnit!!! :D

Sparky .x