This story is amazing... I just spent the last 4 hours reading it from start to finish. Not many stories can keep me up till 4am without caffiene. You're a very talented writer. The ending made me so sad...
So i havent finished...I love the story but your writing is very bland (not trying to be rude just trying to help) try to add more detail and use a larger variety of words (be poetic in a way) to make it more interesting
Wow. I really like it. Definitley keep writing, you have alot of talent. Not many authors can keep me gripped like that. I spent the last 2-3 hours reading non-stop and now it's midnight and i'm tired. It takes talent to write something powerful like this. I really want to read more.