The Sky. - Comments

I cried.
That's all I can say about this without explaining how much I loved it in more words than the actual story contained. xD

"You've Already Written It!" Prewrite Contest:

Layout: The layout was simply stunning. I loved the banner, and the blue background and white story area matched perfectly.

Content: This was sooo good. I liked your use of imagery and diction; it helped this story stand out.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: No mistakes, and great vocabulary!

Overall: This piece was very beautiful.

I loved her and I didn't even know her.
I think everyone can relate to that. I know I can, at the moment.

This was beyond adorable, I really loved it. All the little emotions you added in there made me want to smile. This was really great.
Amazing job. <3

This has so much meaning even though it's so short. I absolutely love it. Your writing astonishes, and the layout and banner are absolutely beautiful. The last two lines really hit home, as I'm sure they did with a lot of people who read this. Great, great job :)

~I'm judging for this contest~

Firstly: the rules. The link to my contest was there. Grammar seemed great and the layout was so nice! The picture was gorgeous.

Your writing is astonishing. The way you describe everything in relation to the feelings of the character, how you personify. You have such a gift, I may have to check out your other stuff.
“I was a prisoner of the darkness, held back by my unwilling willingness.”
“ Sunlight lay sprawled along my kitchen table, its fingers probing at the worn wood and emphasizing its obvious imperfections.”

Short, but lovely. I really enjoyed reading it!

Well done! Be sure to keep checking the competition page for the results!

Despite how short this was, the detail in the writing is amazing. Good job.

This was really amazing. I love every little emotion and detail you put into this. The only thing I dislike about one shots is how I hunger for more, yet I can never have it. :( Thanks for recommending this.

First: I really like that banner.

Sunlight lay sprawled along my kitchen table
^^ I love that personification. It just makes it sound so wonderful and lazy and like it doesn't want to leave...like it belongs there and has that right to just take over the kitchen table.

I like how you play on the sun, then turn it around and use the contrast of the darkness. I thought that was pretty good. :]

I also like the ending, especially this line: I loved her and I didn't even know her. It kind of made me grin one of those cynical grins for some reason or another. I like how you didn't allude it to lust, which would be what most people would think. You know? Oh, that's not love...it's just lust. You can't love someone you don't know....

I quite liked it. And the fact that it was short was pretty neat. You didn't use a tonne of words which were completely unnecessary. It was beautiful. :]

(It took me five weeks to read your story and comment. I did it!! Sorry for the long wait, but that story was a nice read. :])

I was a prisoner of the darkness, held back by my unwilling willingness. Each ray of light was a punishment, a reminder of what I had lost. <-- That was my favorite part. I colmpletly loved this. You put so much emotion in to it. I felt like I was the person telling the story. It was just Dazzling.

:}

Gabby stole my words exactly. The opening to this draws in the reader straight away. The length of this is just right, and your descriptions are flawless. It had an elegance about it, something bittersweet, yet heart-wrenchingly sorrowful too.

You are an amazing writer!

This may be pretty short, but it said so much.
I completely agree with gabbykillsmeese.
She said it all, haha (:
Love it! <3

'Kay so basically, I love you.
Legit.
You're writing is amazing. The descriptions flowed so nicely, and it was simply beautiful!
I think the shortness made it all the much more emphasized, more severe.
Gah, it's just so amazing.
I want to quote the entire thing!

This is beautiful, even though it's so short.

I was a prisoner of the darkness, held back by my unwilling willingness.
I love that contradiction, it really shows the internal struggle of your character.

You've got talent, my darling (:
Keep it up.

Spectacular.
Just spectacular.
You really painted a picture in my head with this.
It was well-written and just beautiful.
<3

thanks for sharing this with me :D
I loved her and I didn't even know her.

And that was the worst part. - I could relate to these two lines, except it's about a guy, *sigh*
it was wonderful, i'm going to check out your other works :D

Wow, that was amazing.
I always say awesome things can come in small packages.
I absolutely adored every bit of it and I love the banner for it.
It was just amazing :)

If I could copy and paste this whole thing on here and tell you I absolutely adored this, I would. Believe it or not, I loved everything about this. I liked the detail, the emotion, the words, just everything really. And the banner was simply amazing.