As Lovers Go - Comments

*Acciddently hit the send button early.

Anyways, as I was saying, I loved it, It was cute and adorable, heart wrenching and sad, and just plain amazing.

I loved it. Twas really cute. The ending reminded me a bit of Twilight though >.> Anyways, I really liked the plot, it was really relatable(Well, not the moving away part)

I--LOVED--IT. Love, love, love, love, LOVE! =D I was about ready to beat the living crap out of him, but he came back. Oh how we wish they would all come back...

Fantastic, really. =]

Amazing. Incredible. Love the plot. Love the characters :D. Love the layout. Love the ending. Be my heroine?

Contest Judging.
I really like the green themed layout.
The photo you used made it look lovely.

I'm actually not familiar with this character, so if you could let me know what he's from, that would be lovely.

. That. or she'd analyze everything no comma after that

Aside from that there were no errors.

I really, really liked this. It was sad and it was heartwrenching and it was tearjerking.
For some reason whenever I read something sad my fingers hurt, you made them hurt.XD

Although, the ending

"Be my heroine?" he breathed, cupping her face in his hand like the most precious treasure in the world. To him, she was.

Theresa felt herself smiling--he was finally going to put an end to all the painful tugs at her heart. He was here, he was hers, and she was his--everything she'd wished for had come true.

"Yes. Yes. A hundred thousand times and then a dozen more--yes."

So, so cheesy. lol. Good job, the winners will be announced soon.

that was one of the most beautiful things i have ever read. Well done!

Goodness! This story was amazing - in every sense of the word.
The way you were able to describe her emotions, their meeting, and their relationship,
Was perfect. I could literally envision it in my mind.
I also liked how you took the song, and made it your own.
You didn't try to make it fit the song perfectly, but yet, it did. If that makes sense. Lol.
I didn't notice any mistakes or spelling errors, and I loved the layout - all of which are plusses.
I also loved the ending, and how it was sort of a 'happily ever after', but not in a cliche way.
You did an amazing job! (:

Brilliantly written
You said that your fond of this story,
your writing flows and is very good.
I liek that it isn't just another typical story.
Thanks For Entering The Contest

"The rocks would click quietly against the window, she'd get up to let him in, and then he'd press her down into the gentle creases of the bed, their bodies molding together and drifting apart like sand and water.

It was during one of these nights that Theresa realized she loved him. Lying there beside him, after having been spent and covered in a thin layer of sweat, the fan twirling quietly on the other side of the room--it hit her. She wanted to wake up next to that beautiful boy for as long as she could, to trace his tattoos with her fingers and play with his hair when she was too tired to do anything else. It was him that she saw in her future, though she knew better than to let it get to her head. He had the option to leave at any time, of course--after all, nothing between them had ever been laid out clearly. But Theresa suddenly wanted it to be definite--she wanted him to be hers and hers alone, unconditionally.

But she never said a word. She continued their pattern of sleepless nights, pretending in their brief time together that he was, indeed, hers--a twisted fantasy that she came to hate herself for later."

I know that's long, but that is my absolute favourite part. I think it's the wording, and how it flows together. The part about the twisted fantasy pulled at my heartstrings, and when you wrote about him slipping away I felt the raw emotions.

This was a very interesting read, and I didn't notice any mistakes. :) Well done!

Wonderfully done. I really like how you started it off, and the ending made me smile. All of the in between was just as good. Your writing flows very well, and as i defy you star. said, your metaphors and imagery were perfect.
There's nothing wrong that I can see gramatically or otherwise. Simply perfect. :)

I like how this isn't typically happy ever after material and then suddenly it is and there is a happy ever after even though I was expecting her life to be totally shit after him.
So I kind of loveloveloved this a lot. It was really beautiful and your metaphors and imagery were spot on. I was going to give this a 10 on rate the story but then I realised I had nothing good to follow it with so yeah, just letting you know.
Well done!