You Are Just a Blur - Comments

As short as it was, it made me feel really sad.
It also makes me want to move to the beach.
Annd... it was just a really short and sweet one-shot.
GOOD JOB! I

One Shot for One Shot.

I'm going to comment as I go, so sorry if it makes it a bit jumbled. (:
First off, I love the layout. It's simple, and stunning.
I adore how you began with a single line. It immediately caught my attention, and made me want to keep reading.

This is beautiful, the idea that Gianna can light up the stars. It's like a fairytale, almost. It makes me yearn for it not to be a dream and for it to be real. And then you make it real, turning her character into a tangible thing, and not just a figment of his imagination. Although, for me...it's almost as if he's building her up in his mind by letting her light up the stars, and having her crash down to earth every time he wakes up. It's cruel of his subconscious.

For a moment I had wondered if she had just left him, but your subtle hints lead me to believe she died. This makes me want to cry, at the beauty of it and just the overall sadness. The last line broke my heart. I wanted to weep for David.

This is short, but it has so much emotion, and it's beautiful. I loved it.

This was beautiful, really, you have such a wonderful way of writing.
I also really loved the emotion.
It was really good.

I don't know what contest this was for. But I really loved it. It was sweet and sad and beautiful. :) I also really liked your literal interpretation of the lyrics. Good luck!