Epica! - Comments

Comment Swap introduced me to your story. I'll definitely recommend this story. The first chapter made me have curiosity about what exactly this story would lead to. The chapters are long enough and very detailed which is a huge plus. You're going somewhere with this story and should continue it.

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Your writing is really inspiring. I think the idea of tackling science and religion is pretty brave, but you handled it really well. I loved your characters, they were so true to themselves - although I did find myself a little bit annoyed with Helena, lol. as for the writing itself, it's perfect. there were a few grammar and spelling errors in the first few chapters but, that got better as the story progressed. I really look forward to reading more of your work, you are such a talented writer :)

This is such a... an indescribable story. The plot line, while a tad unconventional and got me for a sec on the attempts to follow it, is amazing. Your writing is nearly error free and has amazing flow to you. There are a couple mistakes, but otherwise it's amazing!

I love this story so far; it has such an interesting and original plot that keeps me thinking. The summary on the front page immediately enticed me into reading and I like your simple, clean layout. The only thing I suggest is to re-read once you've written a chapter because a few areas have small mistakes (just for if you're into being picky haha!)
Great job :)

I happened upon your tale, of searching and intellect. I was hoping to understand what happened to that strange seeming creature. It seemed to be the devil, and seemed to be strange, but I really don't understand what it is supposed to mean.

I also want to know, why is this rated R?

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So I really like the originality of this story, and how it has a religious aspect to it! It keeps things fresh on Mibba! I think you have a great start to your story, and I enjoyed reading the Prologue. I like the layout, it drew me in at first! I didn't see any grammar errors, so thats good!!

This is a really cool and original idea, and held my attention from the very beginning. I enjoyed the sudden jump of the character's personality as time passed, and the vivid grittiness of everything around him. The world you've created feels real and tangible. Your summary was really fun and creative, and I applaud you for that!

However, I think it'd be a good idea for you to go back and reread your chapters for some editing. Frequently you'll leave out a word or throw an unnecessary word in, leading to a real jumbled sentence. I wouldn't bring it up if it didn't ruin the flow of the chapters.

Sometimes you also will use the wrong pronoun, such as when talking about Ariel rolling over you'll say something like, "He rolled over onto her back." That happens pretty frequently as well.

You have a really interesting piece, and with some rereading and little edits you'll have a very outstanding piece. Your descriptions are excellent, and I think this will have a great future.

Well, greetings from comment swap!

I must say, I really love this story, and I could tell that Its love just from reading the summery.

I also must say, that its obvious that you put a lot of thought, and detail into each chapter. I also like how you gave Ariel an addiction problem that pretty much lasted for more than one chapter.

That only problem I really had was when I got to the super long chapter, but that's more of a personal thing, and so I can't really penalize you for that.

All and all, awesome story, and I will have continue reading!

Great update. :)

Waiting for an update. :)

Just letting you know I'm still here.
The update was rather riveting... at least to me.
It was worth the wait. :)

This story is freaking awesome if you want it to be even better listen to Kamelot's albums Epica and the black halo I think it really adds to it. :D

:D I haven't read this story for so long!
And I still love it!
I can never have an idea like this.

You are a one amazing writer :)
Keep up the good work ;)

Appreciated the update.
It was lovely. Your descriptions are very beautiful. If Mephisto ever had a banquet that's what it would look like.

Good luck with updating your other stories.

I'm really excited that someone decided to write the Epica Saga out (unless it's just going to be Epica).
I will definitely subscribe and read on my free time. :)

This is amazing.
You have such a way with words- they paint a perfect picture of what is taking place in the story.
And it's so unique- I'm addicted.
Update soon, I hope.

I think the truth is of the world, how it came to be, the answers to everything, God etc.
I don't know.
That's how I interpret it.
Great work with the story so far.

Come on, keep going! If you find your insperation from things, then look at others that remind you of it! It's going great so far!

keep going strong, your story is epic.. im confused though, what truth is he after?

Wow, you illustrate everything so well.
The first paragraph drew me in completely.
There's a few minor spelling mistakes but overall it's quite good.