Bound. - Comments

I'm assuming you've changed your username? lol, the one on the banner no longer matches.

Anywho, the prologue is what I shall review for you.

I don't have much to say other than I don't see why you think this needs to be fixed, what you have in just this prologue is excellent. I can't find a bit that needs more detail or any more information than you've already given. Everything is the perfect amount if that makes sense. Your word choice is well done and I can see from my previous comment up there that this was written awhile ago. [totally don't remember reading this]. But yes, from just this prologue you have a great start. I'll subscribe and read more later.

What caught my eye was the layout, I think it's simply gorgeous. The picture at the top too, gorgeous. The only thing I'm unsure of is I don't believe you're allowed to have periods at the end of your story title.

The summary was only a line, loved it thought, I think it did a really good job of giving us a idea of what the story was about.

I think you did a lovely job writing this piece, right from the beginning you set the tone for the story and I liked it, I think you did a wonderful job writing this.

Lovely idea you have also, and you did a fantastic job writing it, with not a word out of place or anything. The idea is very original and you did a fantastic job writing it (like I've mentioned four thousand times before) and I think it's going somewhere good.

I only read the first chapter but I do indeed think that I'll be subscribing to it, because this is very interesting and I'm very curious to see where it's going.

I hope you publish a book one day. This is most definitely something I'd buy from a bookstore.
This was striking. <3

This is a great idea for a story, truly amazing :D and you like flight of the conchords :) you rock :)

This confused me. A lot. But I think I understood around the third chapter xD

You did a great job, I love your style of writing, and I simply love the original plot line. Wow.

Gosh, you're just amazing.

Long over-due comment from like, forever ago.

I really like this, and that's not saying enough. This is definitely going somewhere great, and I love it. The beginning sort of confused me at first, but it does make sense with more chapters. You are really good at writing in first person, which is something I'm jealous of. >.>

I liked James' chapter best. I liked his bluntness and description of those around him. ;D Gross, but funny.

Overall, this plot is lovely, and I will totally keep reading more. :) -subscribes-

Hey, there! :)

I must say, what really caught my eye was the beautiful layout. It just flows perfectly. And I love your writing style, and the plot is well written. But, there were some capitalization problems that bothered me. example one.

But I really like this story, and I'm subscribing. :)

Firstly, that photo is beautiful.
I adore the plot line and the simple style of writing.
Also, the plain Jane names really make this story[ I don't know why but they do]
You've got an incredible way of wording things and flowing everything together.

I must say this is very different in a good way. Quite an imagination you have. So refreshing from the other stories. I can honestly say this is a one of a kind story. Great job and I'll be looking out for updates.

[: I think you're pretty good at descriptions. I like it.

The plot is very original. I absolutely love it.
There isn't really much to say, other than great job!
And keep up the good work.
I hope you update soon! :3

I love this, especially Julie. She reminds me of myself.

Please update:)

I agree with ILoveMyBrownEyedGirl. This is really great. The plot line is really just...wow. I'm glad you recommended this (: Great job! <3

It's about time Mibbba seen something new :D
This is a very good story, very well written and the plot line and idea for this story is very original.
You have to update soon! I can't wait to read more!

This is really original. I love the plot (and I'm proud to say I'm not confused by it!). I love the differences in writing from Julie's point of view to James's. I really enjoyed this, and I'm going to subscribe =D

unlike anything i've seen on this site.
great job. can't wait to see where it goes from here. (:

This story is quite uniquely amazing.
I've never read anything remotely like it before.
Your word use is so good that it just makes me feel like I'm reading an actual book. It's really enjoyable to read. I never thought the plot would be what it was from the banner, I figured it'd be a stereotypical love story.

oh but man I was wrong.

I'm subscribing :]

This is wow! Its just so different and you write so well.
I love your scenery and description. Everything just flows like water.
Your characters are some of the most intriguing I've read in a while.

I'm subscribing, I think I may just love this, a lot.
Too much.

This is so awesome.
It's the first true fantasy story I've read in a while.
I mean, like one that takes place in another time and another world.
I like how you described the countries at the beginning, and how they are like twins. Like... describing the scenery just like a character. I loved that.
And you quoted 30 Seconds To Mars!
This story has my eternal love. <3

This chapter cracked me up. Lovely update, and I'm waiting for more.