Curly Locks - Comments

Sweett :D

It was so innocent at first, but then I see Henry's true colors. Poor Curly Locks, she needed to toughen up a bit, yes? Very good work, I loved it.

Hahahha; Nicee Paw. I liked it. It was adorable. Especially the ending.

Retell a Nursery Rhyme Contest
The first paragraph just screams classic abusive husband-martyr wife relationship, which could be a good thing. It would be a really good thing if the situation were to change at the very end, but since in the end their relationship is still the same, I guess this paragraph is just a little bit too much of a giveaway.

“Why is your voice so quiet, darling little Curly Locks?”
“Because you take my breath away, Henry,” I answer back shakily. – that was a nice response. Too bad it didn't work for her :(

Henry throws the bowl down, splattering cream and sugar and red, red strawberries all over my dress. – somehow, I really like the “red, red” here. It kind of adds danger or something like that

Ugh, Curly Locks is such an idiot. I agree with 1st commenter, I would punch the guy in the face. Then I would kick him in the groin, drown him in sugar and cream, and poke his eyes with my sewing needle! Haha, okay, enough with the evil ranting.

I thought the way it was written was nice because it still had the feel of a nursery rhyme all throughout, especially when Henry interrogates Curly Locks. It made me think of the conversation between little red riding hood and the grandma/wolf, only different. Good job on that. :)

this is sweeet.

Man, if I were Curly Locks I would have punched Henry in the face.
But I liked the story, good job!