Curly Locks - Comments

  • lilaye24

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    Sweett :D
    November 28th, 2010 at 05:05am
  • Lunar

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    It was so innocent at first, but then I see Henry's true colors. Poor Curly Locks, she needed to toughen up a bit, yes? Very good work, I loved it.
    May 16th, 2010 at 08:55pm
  • s3lf-r3criminati0n

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    Hahahha; Nicee Paw. I liked it. It was adorable. Especially the ending.
    May 13th, 2010 at 01:00am
  • still a secret

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    Retell a Nursery Rhyme Contest
    The first paragraph just screams classic abusive husband-martyr wife relationship, which could be a good thing. It would be a really good thing if the situation were to change at the very end, but since in the end their relationship is still the same, I guess this paragraph is just a little bit too much of a giveaway.

    “Why is your voice so quiet, darling little Curly Locks?”
    “Because you take my breath away, Henry,” I answer back shakily.
    – that was a nice response. Too bad it didn't work for her :(

    Henry throws the bowl down, splattering cream and sugar and red, red strawberries all over my dress. – somehow, I really like the “red, red” here. It kind of adds danger or something like that

    Ugh, Curly Locks is such an idiot. I agree with 1st commenter, I would punch the guy in the face. Then I would kick him in the groin, drown him in sugar and cream, and poke his eyes with my sewing needle! Haha, okay, enough with the evil ranting.

    I thought the way it was written was nice because it still had the feel of a nursery rhyme all throughout, especially when Henry interrogates Curly Locks. It made me think of the conversation between little red riding hood and the grandma/wolf, only different. Good job on that. :)
    May 9th, 2010 at 06:02am
  • melinda 666

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    this is sweeet.
    April 26th, 2010 at 01:13am
  • ShallWeDance?

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    Man, if I were Curly Locks I would have punched Henry in the face.
    But I liked the story, good job!
    April 10th, 2010 at 11:51pm