This line: "Kill you? I'm not killing you. I'm making you immortal." Is simply amazing, I'm jealous. I love it. It's amazing and means so much more then what the poor kids realized.
I wish it were longer and more detailed, but I enjoyed it nonetheless.
This is...macabre. But...it's really interesting. I mean, I'm not into killing, but this really got me curious. Well, I have no idea which direction this will take and that's what makes it interesting. And even though this really is kinda horrible, I envy you for your glorious ideas.
Gosh, thanks for putting me in your authors note - again. It makes me feel kinda special. thank you. :)
Wonderful job.
Very realistic.