I need you, like a bullet to my brain - Comments

Lovin the story to the max!!! Please update!!

Ohh like this :) Update soon (Y) x

you should try and continue it's not so bad. {:

wooo cant wait for an update

Love the story, can't wait for another chapter :]

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You still need to be aware of proper punctuation. At the end of something someone said, you need a period or a question mark, etc etc.
"You will and you will like it." I told her and UN-cuffed her hands,"Shadows wants you to be ready in two hours." I told her and and left the room and locked it.
How come 'un' is in caps?

Anyways. Way to go guys. Can't change a diaper lol. Plus, Matt sure likes to make people dress like prostitutes. And the 'click here' link-thing is
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Short. But loved it anyway! Update soon!

xx :)

this is love

This story, in my opinion is one of the best :)
I just love it! You're a great writer!
Update whenever possible!
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woooo this story sounds awesome already.

Jeez...Matt is such an ass in this chappy! Can't wait for more! xx :)

OH MY GOD!!!
matt you douche!

awesome updates cant wait for more

"That will be Molly's kid" Christ said as he walked over to where Vengeance and I are standing.
*would be Molly's kid.

Forgot to mention, *were standing, not 'are' due to the fact you are using past tense and cannot go from past to present.

"What the fuck is that" I asked no one in particular.
you need to use punctuation. That also goes for every other piece of dialog.

"That will be Molly's kid" Christ said as he walked over to where Vengeance and I are standing.
*would be Molly's kid.
"She has a brat" I asked, shock evident in his voice.
You can't have it in Matt's POV, then change it. i.e, going from "I asked" to "shock evident in HIS voice."
"I guess, and you woke it up" Vengeance said an shrugged like it was no big deal.
*and
"Fuck" I mumbled as he walked past his best friends and headed towards the source of the crying.
So, is Matt walking past his bestfriend, or is Zacky?

As I neared the room with the crying baby,I could faintly hear the sound that he longed to hear, Molly's voice.

Molly looked up at him, fear was written all over her beautiful face. "M-Matt" Molly stuttered out as she tried to scoot further up the bed, but couldn't because she was handcuffed to the bed.
"Glad to know you remember me" I said as I walked into the room and closed the door behind me.
You said she looked up at HIM, then changed to Shadow's POV using 'I'

"What's her name" I asked Molly in a commanding voice.

Once again, punctuation is very important. Question marks are you're friend!

I suggest you go over the chapter, because the POVs make little sense.

I'm really not trying to be nit-picky and rude, but it doesn't make sense.
Sorry :/

But, on another note: Way to be a douche, Shadows! Rawr.
Can't wait to see what he does to the baby...

He better not hurt the kid

I'm thinking the baby is actually his and he just doesn't know it.