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celestial_royalty (100)

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I tink it was ch 12 when Zack had a Range Rover but the rest of the time it was an Escalade o.O

September 4th, 2012 at 09:56pm

Saiyuo12 (100)

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Great story.

January 24th, 2012 at 02:56am

Ayannaxx. (100)

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loved the whole story your a great writer, hope you keep it up xxx thanks

February 28th, 2011 at 12:01pm

celestial_royalty (100)

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Okay, well I hope you appreciate comments, because it took me a HELL of a lot of time to compile all of my thoughts and opinions on your story. A LONG. ASSED. TIME. Here it is...

Ch 1- aha, I love her already

Halfway down and I’m lovin her more!

Ch 2- uhh Rosalie would SO not say that. No way no how.

THAT’S CHANNING TATUM! It totally clicked when I saw the bottom. I like him with longer hair… :(

Ch 4- to Edward: LOOK WHO’S TALKING! *thinks of all the pain and troubles he’s brought to his family AND his stupid bitch, just to make him feel as bad as he should be, gives a glare full of menace and hate, then turns it to the unworthy human, who would then feel worthless and threatened*

Ch 5- I think it’s pretty dumb that he noticed all that and suspected that she’s not human, after several hours of interaction in their lives. Seriously.

Ch 6- I think I just said it all, so…yeah…

Ch 10- Yeah, it’s kind of dumb how she’s all “you should you should” like she knows what’s best for him. It’s kind of annoying how she’s practically trying to plan his life. Key words “HIS LIFE”, repeat: HIS

Ch 11- When he asked what Zack could provide but he couldn’t, she should have said “would you really like me to list them out? I could seriously go on for days.”

And seriously, she should have, at the VERY LEAST, punched him.

Ch 12- Around the middle of the page, she called Emmett “Edward”

Why does he have a cigarette lighter?

Ch 13- Why is she always wearing men’s shoes…

Ch 25- She’s such a drama queen. Seriously, any smart person can see that she could just say “I’m sorry, and I love you”. Jeez is it so freaking hard?

Ch 27- He just dumped, died, turned into a vampire and didn’t see her for ages. Seriously? Give him a freakin break.

Ch 28- A few weeks? She’s a fucking liar. I hope Zack dumps her ass and moves on and she ends up miserable and hearbroken. She would TOTALLY. DESERVE IT.

Hahaha, gotta love the kids.

Ch 29- Zack’s hot. I don’t like Scarlett anymore and I stuck by what I said last chapter

February 27th, 2011 at 12:11pm