August 31st, 2010 at 04:08am
This was really deep and I liked that. Especially the "If you play alone you will never lose" thing. Which is true. Time to start playing Mario Kart alone. :D XD
Anyway. A bit of trivia for you. The first story I was asked to read was about parents fighting and a girl crying in her room. The second had the word "Bee" in the title. And yours was about parents fighting and a girl crying in her room, and the girl's nickname was Bee. XD That is just creepy.
The layout was really nice. In the summary page, it backs up a little bit into the picture, but then when you click on the chapter it fixes itself and it was a really beautiful layout. Your description was fantastic. And I like how you didn't mention who the man was. Obviously it had to be her brother because he referred to their parents as Mom and Dad, but you never said 'her brother'. And I felt myself being so sorry for the poor little girl. :( You have a lot of human contact and I like that. <3 Also like how she tried to break it up before she realized it wasn't going to work.
Very nice. :)
I'm seriously still in shock about the whole thing. I felt like crying as the little girl recounted how the young man made all these promises to her, yet he broke almost each and everyone of them. It was so sad, and it really impacted me. I keep thinking about the people who have to go through this everyday. The story went amazing with the picture. Amazing job dear! :)