Chronicles of the Accursed One: Fatal Ties - Comments

oh wow u r such a dork but i love the story!!!!!

i love it. u r such an amazing writer. and yes i do mean that. i still cant believe you r writing a story about me tho. but anywhos i still love it.

:) I liked seeing things from her point of view :D

And I think shorter chapters would be good, the first one took me ages to get through. Shorter chapters are less daunting to readers and if it means you'll update more than thats great! :D

Let's see how this goes. ^_^

Whoa. thats an epic first chapter. So much happened. I really like how its so different from everything on here :) Well done. You're a very talented writer, I like that you're very descriptive with everything.
Theres just one thing that bugged me thoughout it. You kept jumping from past to present tense and back. For example..."I gaze at him and smile, saying...." and then a few lines down from that "and I lunged forward with a stab " I wasn't sure if it was happening..or if it had already happened. :) But if you fix that it'll be great!