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  • revelio.

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    This is so well-written. I love the more formal feel than coversational since it fits with the mood perfectly.

    I also love the playful touches that brought the reader back to reality; after all, these two are in love. Not everything's all fluffy and good, yet it isn't all serious and dramatic either. You mixed the two exceptionally well throughout.

    I have to say, one of my initial favorite parts was the "You creeper" bit. I literally giggled out loud when I read it.Those cute, little moments like that (especially when she was caught staring at him; you really snagged one of my most favorite moments to use in stories there) were spot-on.

    You know me; I'm not really into anime/gaming things, but this didn't feel like that at all. It felt like two, real people interacting with each other. I think this is going on the Pimpin' & Reccin' thread.
    April 19th, 2010 at 08:40pm
  • the fallen.

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    Ohh, Tara tehe
    You amaze me again and again each time.
    I think this was the best Zack/Aerith one shot I ever read.
    Ohh and I say Aerith is one lucky bitch XD

    Great job! Arms
    April 16th, 2010 at 01:13am
  • moxie;

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    This was one of the most adorable things I've ever read.
    You did a great job with the descriptions of both Aerith and Zack. Happy face God knows I would love to run my hand through his hair as well. tehe
    I love the way it just played in my head. Everything was just so orderly and movie-like. You did your research well babe. Con The many descriptions that you used just really helped capture the emotion. Weird Which was perfect for the cute scenarios you played out.

    Arms Another great one, doll.
    April 13th, 2010 at 05:45am
  • akasagarbha

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    Tara, this is beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.

    I love Aerith and Zack's interactions; they're fluid and natural and so adorable that I probably need an insulin shot now. And I won't pick a favorite part because I'd end up quoting every other paragraph, so I hope you'll take my word for it. Arms

    Beautiful. Oh my God, absolutely beautiful, bb.
    April 12th, 2010 at 11:31pm