This is so well-written. I love the more formal feel than coversational since it fits with the mood perfectly.
I also love the playful touches that brought the reader back to reality; after all, these two are in love. Not everything's all fluffy and good, yet it isn't all serious and dramatic either. You mixed the two exceptionally well throughout.
I have to say, one of my initial favorite parts was the "You creeper" bit. I literally giggled out loud when I read it.Those cute, little moments like that (especially when she was caught staring at him; you really snagged one of my most favorite moments to use in stories there) were spot-on.
You know me; I'm not really into anime/gaming things, but this didn't feel like that at all. It felt like two, real people interacting with each other. I think this is going on the Pimpin' & Reccin' thread.
This was one of the most adorable things I've ever read. You did a great job with the descriptions of both Aerith and Zack. God knows I would love to run my hand through his hair as well. I love the way it just played in my head. Everything was just so orderly and movie-like. You did your research well babe. The many descriptions that you used just really helped capture the emotion. Which was perfect for the cute scenarios you played out.
I love Aerith and Zack's interactions; they're fluid and natural and so adorable that I probably need an insulin shot now. And I won't pick a favorite part because I'd end up quoting every other paragraph, so I hope you'll take my word for it.
I also love the playful touches that brought the reader back to reality; after all, these two are in love. Not everything's all fluffy and good, yet it isn't all serious and dramatic either. You mixed the two exceptionally well throughout.
I have to say, one of my initial favorite parts was the "You creeper" bit. I literally giggled out loud when I read it.Those cute, little moments like that (especially when she was caught staring at him; you really snagged one of my most favorite moments to use in stories there) were spot-on.
You know me; I'm not really into anime/gaming things, but this didn't feel like that at all. It felt like two, real people interacting with each other. I think this is going on the Pimpin' & Reccin' thread.