At The Field - Comments

Great job writing this! :) I like it. Very creative and brilliant as well. :)

That's it, as in the whole story? It's a bit short, but despite length, it's done well. You get a feel for the characters and the situation quite well, mostly because of the descriptions. This is benefited by the short length, as I'm sure you'll find when writing larger stories you may have to ease up on descriptions occasionally. For what it is, though, an assignment about describing things, it works rather well. Definitely a solid work on your part. Congrats. :)

This is very descriptive and emotional. I like your writing style.