Harder Than My Heart - Comments

totes crying right now ;-; that was so freaking beautiful! best one-shot i've ever read, honestly!

<33333333 love

Awww that was just... AWWWW!!! Yay, they get back together. You are making me crush on Oli again, by the way. I started listening to them again because of your stories lol <3

loved this one too:) your a great writer

So good. :)

BEAUTIFUL!
I'm gonna go read it again :D
Seriously, I am.

Before; 14th March 2008
really intense...I actually felt what she felt...even though I'd never understand people who prefer breaking up with someone who's going away because "they cant wait around".

The pain of being away from him and not being able to even say an "I love you" or an "I miss you" is even worse.

But you somehow convised me that whatever happens next is just natural.

After; 15th November 2009

"I just wanted to be swallowed into a black hole."
thats what I mean;/

Before; 15th March 2008

"I shook my head. “I don’t want yer to go.” I choked, my hands coming up to the collar of his top, gripping the material forcefully as my eyes watered."

"“I’ll be missing yer too; I’ll be wanting yer with me too. It’s not for… not for too long Faye; I promise I’ll be coming back for yer. Once I’m back we can – we can buy a place together! Get a dog like we talked about. Just please, please.”"
vigorous scenes.

"He quickly slipped his arms around my neck, pulling me into him and burying his face into the crock of his neck as he cried viciously. "
I guess with him trying to be calm all those days before going away were crushing down on him. That...and the pain.

"“If yer gonna do this at least fucking look at me.” "
oooooooohhhhhhhhhh.....YOU HAVE ME!!!
I fcking ADORE drama like that!!!!!!!!!!

"“Not everyone who loves each other ends up together Oli.” "
*sigh*

After; 16th November 2009

"My eyes snapped open as the familiar voice I hadn’t heard for 18 months filled my ears. "
YESSSS I KNEW IT!!!!!!!!!!!
my heart would stop! :p

yeah like that: "My heart was beating so fast that I could hear it pounding in my ears loudly. "

"He looked better than ever. "
they always do! ;/

"If he hadn’t stopped thinking about me then why hadn’t he tried to get in touch with me?"
indeed!

"“I didn’t think yer wanted to talk to me… After… well, after that day, the way things ended I didn’t think yer wanted anything to do with me.”"
damn!! you gave me that feeling in the stomach!!

"I love yer and yer love me… so it doesn’t matter, everything else doesn’t matter. "
THANK YOU! some things really are THAT simple!

love this one!!! <3

“Not everyone who loves each other ends up together Oli.”

xx

“People who love each other as much as we do, do end up together Faye, they’re meant to, because they are meant for each other.”

That is like extreme closure! This was so nice. It made me sad and then happy, if I wasn't so thick- skinned a tear or two might have made an appearance. One thing though, in dialogue when you write (same for in it had to be you)

"Oli, I don't know." I said warily.

should be

"Oli, I don't know," I said warily.

Little things like that drive me and probably lots of people crazy. In your writing, I just noticed, that you make alot of little mistakes like that that kind of take away it. Maybe if you proofread more or got an editor. Just trying to help. I still love you.

:D

This one shot was so awsome it made me and my neice cry
ugh you make some great stuff :]

I wanted to cry the whole time I was reading this. The part where she broke up with him and just the way Oli was acting, crying and being angry at the same time, as well as completely heartbroken, it was so sad. And the fact that they ended up together at the end because people like them were meant to be together was just amazing. This one shot was so gorgeous. You really played with emotions in this one and it turned out really good. :D

amazing one shot. i loved every moment of it. :]

“No!” Oli yelled, gritting his teeth as he pulled my head back to his face, bring my face towards him so our foreheads were pressed against each other. “If yer gonna do this at least fucking look at me.”

This part really got me going with the waterworks and such. I Love this oneshot. I Think its actually the best one that ive ever ever everrr read before on my time on mibba. Its so emotional and passionate, and it makes it hard for it to be that way because its a one-shot and you only have one chapter to make the connection between them strong, so the story is more effective, but i think you did a beautifull job of showing the connection. Like the little thing that they did to each other to prove that they were in love. They are really such a cutesy couple, its adorable. I adoree how she trys to be strong, and trys to convince herself its the best, But deep down she KNOWS that its killing her and Oliver but shes just so determined that she needs to do it, and she needs to do it before he leaves or she will be in diar trouble. bravo, you really have gotten so well at writing your one shots, truly an inspiration. As always, thank you for the pleasure of the oneshot.

Why did you spell you like "yer"? And "aye" instead of yes.
I really liked this oneshot, but that just threw me off, a lot.

“Not everyone who loves each other ends up together Oli.”
That made me a wee bit sad, I'll admit. You did an amazing job, I loved this. You've got a real talent for amazing one shots!

“People who love each other as much as we do, do end up together Faye, they’re meant to, because they are meant for each other.”

I loved that, tremendously.
That's my favorite line.

As for the one-shot altogether,
I absolutely adored it.
Definitely one of my favorites.
<3