Stuck in Between - Comments

OH my gosh I love the ending! I'm so glad everything worked out well! Peter is back?! Did he ever leave? Hmmm, oh well...I love him :D

i dont know... how it can be a sequel i mean WHAT can happen next :) ?

:3 I loved the ending, you SHOULD write a sequel. :D

this is awesome!!!! i love and im addicted! keep updating! ps make a character for Peter too! *subscribes*

thaaaanksss :)))) i'll keep writing whenever i cann

Very intriguing, and I'm eager to know more =) I'm waiting for more =)

Thank you very very much :)

I just love the details in chapter 7! I also love your idea on what might happen when you die, you give a well painted image. Very brilliant, I'll be watching. - Unknown

i loved the recent chapter.

Wha oh, I'm confused. Shouldn't it be Jess' point of view and not Jenn's? Or maybe I got 'em mixed up or misread... Anyway. I like the intense feelings, details are still good. I can't wait to see more of it and find out more 'bout the mysterious land between life and death. Great work. I'll be watching. - Unknown

thanks :)

I hope everything will get much better.
It's very emotional, yet I love the suspense.
Great job! :)

A very intense story. I love how it's fast paced and just makes you curious. I'm glad you went into the suspense immediately! You have my attention. - Unknown

this is like... REALLY good. i love it! i'm SOOO going to subscribe :)

heyy , thanks for your comment. and you're right i dont really care about little grammar mistakes :) (as you can read now) . But I'll try to check those things , thanks! Keep readingg

I like the plot of this story a lot. You're letting out small details of the story every chapter, and I think it's a good suspense effect :)

However (only a small however), you need to look over the grammar a little. For instance, you wrote "i" instead of "I," which is slightly irritating for some grammar-obsessed readers (like me). Also, you wrote "dont" instead of "do not" or "don't." I think if you have a look over the story you've submitted so far, and check over these small, tiny mistakes, you can really improve the quality of this story.

Anyway, I like it, I'm subscribing. :) I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

I really like this so far!
I've subscribed - can't wait for more :D

Oh , thanks :) I will use your advices , please keep reading and tell if I am progressing :)

There's a book like this called Everlost if you ever want to check that out. It's a really good book and sounds something like what you're trying to do here...and they're going to be making it into a movie :D

Okay. Now to criticism. You could be putting more detail into this. In the bit where the man hit Jessica's twin, I didn't even know the man and the person who hit her were the same person until you said it a bit farther down. You could also use some introductory phrases like Jessica said, "whatevershesaidhere". That way it clears up who's talking, since it's hard to read the way you've put it.

Overall, though, the idea is good. Just put in some more detail and a little more emotion, because right now it sounds more like they're robots since there's no emotion put into it and no personal thoughts. If you do that it'll improve :)

I know it is kinda sad :S I dont know where they are exactly too :) It just came up to me that there might be a place like that ..