The Wind Blows. - Comments

  • This is a really sweet one shot. I like the descriptive detail you have in it. You go into so much detail about just what she's wearing and about the coffee cup--and I feel like this is more focused around the coffee cup than the actual story and I kind of like it that way. But even with that amount of detail you managed to keep me intrigued throughout the entire thing. :) My only advice is this.

    "I've missed you so much," came a mumbled, almost incoherent, sound from the man hugging hers lips. A huge warm smile swept across her lips,... That first sentence, the end of it just reads awkwardly and then the repetition of 'lips' so close together just kind of disrupts the flow. But other than that, excellent job.
    January 24th, 2011 at 06:11am
  • Aww it's cute [:
    Just never say you can't write, yeah?
    <3
    May 24th, 2010 at 09:45pm
  • I <3 this.....
    Ohmygod, seriously In Love
    I seriously hate myself in that story, I wanna be her XDD
    That was lovely :) You have such an awesome way with words :D
    Loved it, thank you so muchhh Arms
    May 24th, 2010 at 09:45pm