April 27th, 2010 at 09:13pm
Wowza! I liked the first chapter alot, especially the prophecy part. I can't wait for the next chapter!
The layout was extremely big. I'd try to down size it a little. Most people I know who read stories always click on the default page because the layouts people make are hard to read from.
The base line for the story was good. Somethings could have been said differently to make more sense. Words could have been bolder or italicized.
With all of that said I'm not saying you have to change your story at all if you don't want to. It's constructive criticism. I will still read it if you leave it as is! Good job!:P
It seems like a really interesting read!
please update again soon, or if you like check out my own Harry Potter fan fiction, although it's a Draco Malfoy love story x]