A Hole in Heaven - Comments

This was really quite good.
Your descriptions are probably what I liked the most. It really made the story come to life.
The ending was executed wonderfully and the piece overall was very well done.

It seemed like you intended the story to have very large symbolic meaning somewhere. Though, I'm always good with making that kind of stuff, I was never able to reverse it and understand it well. But that's the greatest things of art, everyone interprets it differently.
Either way it was an amazing story. :)

I liked this story. It was detailed wonderfully and I just overall liked the way it was written. I really enjoyed how much thought was put into it, and it seemed like you had done research but I can't explain why. I was able to picture the entire thing in my mind perfectly. Great job!

I thought this was very different...in a good way! :D

I liked this one A LOT.
Despite the fact that I don't agree with the religious aspects about it entirely, I thought it was very well written and unique.
The only thing I felt this story didn't have was a purpose. Of couse it has a theme, but nothing astounding or breath taking. I'm not sure what I'm trying to say here, because the story definitely wasn't dull. I think it's because I would have liked to see it in a chaptered form, and that that would be best for a story like this. But that is not entirely a fault, so I can't blame you as the author for things like that. And short stories are more difficult to make memorable anyway.
Overall, I really liked this one and the emotion behind it, or maybe even the lack of emotion and how you portay that. Good job!