Yellow Flowers - Comments

Short, but very sweet and so sad.

I really liked the first sentence, but I think it would do beter with a period in the middle, like this: "Anna walked up to me, smiling. She always smiled." I just like the "she always smiled" part, it's very sweet and I think that putting a period before it helps the sentence flow better and forces the reader to focus more attention onto it.

"She had a great personality. That's what everyone misses." - brilliant line. :D

I liked this, it was sad but very lovely.

Thaaat's amazing.... And it really mad me emotional.... I loved it :)

This is an interesting lovely piece.
Great job.

This was pretty interesting. Sad, but short and sweet. I liked it. =D

This was sweet, and the last line stung. I felt a little twinge of sadness as I read the ending, but only then. I think you were aiming for short, meaningful sentences. Part of them were, actually. Others sounded like they could actually use some elaboration. I also feel like everything is rushed, in some sort of way. I don't think this needs the '*' separation. Again, this is a very sad drabble and I felt crushed with the last line.

This story was so great and I loved it. It made me tear up at the end. In a way the flowers that were pink and ended up yellow did show she missed you. I loved this story. It was sweet and beautiful. If this wasn't a 1/1 story I would suscribe. I loved it <3

I don't know what you did, or how you did it but your apostrophe's are not apostrophes they're french accents. So, you need to go through and fix that. I like the purpose of this. It was sweet, and meaningful. But the way it was written didn't exactly...pull me in? I don't know, it just kind of felt short and choppy. It didn't exactly flow. But still, very sweet. Very nice purpose.

I don't know, this just got me somehow.
The way with the yellow, a colour. And how the flower grew back from pink into her favourite colour. In a way, it does seem like that, that she's saying she missing you. People can amaze you in so many ways, even when they are dead.
The shortest made it...sweet, and more meaningful then it would have done if it was long and dragging.
This is good. <3