May 4th, 2010 at 02:08am
Aww, how sad. :(
By the way, I meant to put this up in the contest page, but I forgot, I don't take away points for it being a one shot.
I liked the fact that it was sad, but it was still kind of hopeful, y'know?
Excellent job. :]
xo ~Waking the Fallen.
Layout I like the layout, and I think it goes well with the song you were given.
Summary I loved the summary. You told just enought with the excerpt that it gave away just enough, but not to much.
"My head hurts," he said suddenly. Gerard had a way of doing that; that thing where he just exclaimed little out-loud thoughts whether the room gave a fuck or not.
I think this was one of my favorite quotes throughout this story. It made me smile for some unknown reason.
"It must have been." Frank turned back into the room. "I do love you, Gerard. And I guess you love me. But you'll love a lot more people in the future. Just like me." Gerard looked on blankly, chain-smoking like a fucking chimney at Christmas.
this nearly made me cry!!! I didn't want him to leave!!! This really sucked me into this story!!!!
Frank left the bedroom smiling and nodding, sliding his car keys from the dresser. He took one last look of Gerard wrapped up in a swirl of smoke and the unconscious lump beside him. No, he would not feel differently in the morning, but it still meant a lot that Gerard noticed he was tired.
I was so glad that this ended at least a little hopefully! It made me simle.
Overall
I love your writing style. This story itself made me so happy. I rarley ever feel the emotions in stories anymore, but I felt it in this. It was absoluetly amazing. I loved it. Two thumbs up. =D