Power Struggle. - Comments

Personally, I think you should keep this a one-shot, but it's not like you have updated it in a year anyway. Though, I probably say that just because I don't want the ending to be destroyed. I don't understand why you think it's horrible. It explains everything so perfectly in the mist of a few simple sentences, and, honestly, it was my favorite part of the entire shot. “It was all just a power struggle. And Prussia had won.” I can't express how much I love these sentences together like that. If I where to say you had to work on anything it would be the transition from their discussion into the sex scene. It just didn't seem to work for me.

Loved it :) I like the continuing metaphors you had throughout the chapter, of the people, their countries and their role in WWII. It's really well written and am loving the 'relationship' between the two brothers of Prussia and Germany. Update soon! xx

Em liked it. ^___^ Then again, you probably guessed I would before, but that's not the point.
The use of imagery in the first chapter really made the words spring from the page. Really what I'm typing sounds like a load of bull, but I'm hoping you'll know what I mean. ;3
Thinking about it, if that had really happened in the manga, I possibly would have read it a lot more carefully :XD (the manga that is, I read through all of this very carefully **) ^___^
Anyways, tell me when you put the next chapter up! :wow: